You need though to develop the problem discussion more and include more references and more updated references. I do not really understand the last part of the problem discussion. The incorporation…. The way you formulate the purpose is better, but the second part is unclear. Do you need that part? Formulate differently? You want to only focus on the negative impact? Then I do not understand the second RQ. part 2.6 could be a synthesis of the theory chapter and then the figure could be used in that context. In that case you need to develop the text.